Nice! I'd missed the title and read the whole thing as one long poem. And it works. I like the way you shift points of view in the middle. Love, past, and death. There's nothing else worth writing about.
Of these series of short poems my favorite is the first one. I think is well-written and the poetic expression says much. It talks of the now and then in simple language, but that it shows as poetry is clear.
Felt very personal... there's a light at the end, relief, conclusion. Wonderfully written.
These are excellent
How many people feel this:
"All this time
concerned with all
the things which
have no bearing
on anything.
You fool.
Can’t you see that?
Even now."
Almost everybody, unless they are not even self-aware enough to notice.
1.
You left before I
had the chance to
mature enough,
so that I could truly
understand and value you.
LOVE!
Nice! I'd missed the title and read the whole thing as one long poem. And it works. I like the way you shift points of view in the middle. Love, past, and death. There's nothing else worth writing about.
...great work...
No, please do not apologize for excellence!
No 1
Almost every young mans lament.
1 is my favorite
Love the 5th one!!
Of these series of short poems my favorite is the first one. I think is well-written and the poetic expression says much. It talks of the now and then in simple language, but that it shows as poetry is clear.